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In the summertime, she really only took her coffee iced. As she took a drag of her cigarette, she wished that iced cigarettes could be a thing. She stood behind the building, leaning against the brick wall. She took in the smoke of her cigarette along with the disgusting heat and oppressive humidity. She peeled a thin layer of skin off of her sunburnt shoulder, her own body rejecting itself trying to start over again.

Her cigarette break is the most exciting part of her day, and here she is peeling off her skin in an alleyway. Look at where that music degree got her. Delightful.

She can see a boy across the street, busking and playing his saxophone to the rhythm of the midday traffic horns. She looks at her watch and knows her boss will be all over her back when she makes it back upstairs.

Walking by the wannabe jazz-musician, she flicks her cigarette to the ground.

God, get a job.
:iconxthe-eleanorx:
Umm, this was supposed to be inspired by [link] , but it took the sad route. I did try though.

The FFM "Challenge of the Day" was to write inspired by the music of David Bowie. I sort of kind of wanted to write something based on Labyrinth, but I also didn't want to be 'that girl.' Ah well, this is more sane. (debatable.)

:icongoblinkingplz:

Also, I will be updating you all on the progress of my sunburn through FFM. I totally haven't mentioned it in my past 3 pieces.
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:iconshyanne-kai:
'...and here she is peeling off her skin in an alleyway' - My mind immediately went to lizard people :D

I like the oppressive atmosphere in this piece, and that end line really made me think - I bet that 'jobless' jazz musician is a lot happier than she is, by doing something he loves.
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~xthe-eleanorx Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much! (And you're totally right, she's a little bitter because he's happy and doing what he loves while she gave up on it.)
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:iconthebrokenbride:
There's nothing wrong with being the girl who wrote about Labyrinth. I am.

On topic, I really liked this. All the sarcasm and boredom and sticky summer heat and iced coffee; story of my life.
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~xthe-eleanorx Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
Four for you! [link]

And thanks so much! I'm glad you liked it.
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:iconthebrokenbride:
Bahaha, that is the best thing I've seen all week. xD
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~NamelessShe Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I like it. I like the way you describe her sunburn---her own body rejecting itself trying to start over. And I love this--->Walking by the wannabe jazz-musician, she flicks her cigarette to the ground.

God, get a job.
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~xthe-eleanorx Jul 26, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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