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songs drift slowly
from rooms filled with peeling wallpaper
sometimes i feel you wrapped around my heart
touching places you could never reach before
we have a story
worthy of a best-selling paperback
the kind of story
that's only sad when it belongs to you
i try to intertwine my fingers with yours
but it's not really the same
unless you're there too
I took the title from this list of prompts.

Weak ending is weak.

As always, thoughts and comments are much appreciated. :heart:
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laffinia Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012
I like it. Nice and simple.
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xthe-eleanorx Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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laffinia Featured By Owner Sep 3, 2012
welcome
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Lottie-Girl Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012  Student General Artist
Beautiful. :D
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xthe-eleanorx Featured By Owner Jun 3, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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Lottie-Girl Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2012  Student General Artist
Welcome :D
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silverwing2822 Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
this is lovely. I especially like the line "sometimes I feel you wrapped around my heart"
I disagree, the ending isnt weak, I think its just right.
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xthe-eleanorx Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much! :heart:
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TURNIP-SLOP Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
I like it, personally I found the ending to be the strongest part :)
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xthe-eleanorx Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks! :hug:
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AsTheDarknessFalls Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
:heart:
I can say nothing more.
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xthe-eleanorx Featured By Owner May 29, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you! :heart:
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NoOneWouldListen Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
really beautiful =) if you allow me to quote you, my favourite line is "the kind of story that's only sad when it belongs to you"... I don't know if that's what you meant to say, but the truth is that people have a tendence to fall in love with the saddest love tragedies ever, but that happens only because this stories have been lived by others. (This talking against myself too). Your work is wonderful =)
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xthe-eleanorx Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Student Writer
I'm glad you liked it! I can definitely be placed into that category as well. ;)
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NoOneWouldListen Featured By Owner May 28, 2012
you're welcome =)
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Darkthrop Featured By Owner May 27, 2012
well, i like it. a lot. and the title is great:D
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xthe-eleanorx Featured By Owner May 28, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you very much! :heart:
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