I don't really know what to think of this. It took a turn for the rather strange towards the end, but that is the result of leaving a piece to wait overnight. I'm still not super fond of the ending ending.
This was also intended to be poetry, but it isn't.
(Secret between you and me: This is basically a conglomeration of my favorite thoughts and ideas for stories from the past few months.)
1. Are the tenses confusing? I know that I have a few paragraphs in the present, but I really didn't like them in the past tense, so I kept it. Thoughts? [EDIT] I ended up changing it.
2. Does the narration make sense?
3. Your thoughts on the ending?
4. Any other thoughts or comments?