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Temptations

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Literature Text

I saw a demon crawl across the floor,
It whispered secrets to me
Beckoning for me to return
I closed my eyes,
But it never left.

I see a devil dart between the shadows
He offers me a gift,
Tells me I can't decline
I close my eyes,
But it never goes away

I will see a skeleton lie upon the bed
It will show me what is to come
Letting me know I can't escape
I will close my eyes,
But it will never go away.
This is a little different than what I usually write, but we all feel angsty sometimes.

Demons and Devils and Skeletons, Oh my!

Does the third paragraph work with the rest of the poem?
Does the change of tense sound flow well? Or does it disrupt the message of the poem?
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ErnestoNoMuslini's avatar
I see a poem on deviantart
It shows me my inner self
Shapes the thoughts I can't express
I close my eyes
It will never fade away.