Titles are really always awful. I can't decide whether this piece is about the 'man in the coffee shop' or 'you'
1. Does the current title work?
2. Does the sometimes at the beginning of some of the paragraphs sound good or just silly?
3. Are the sentences/paragraphs too choppy?
4. Thoughts/Comments? Love/Hate?
[Daily Literature Deviation 6/15/11]